Thursday, May 7, 2009

Traces of Familiarity


The midnight rain crippled me

As I bellowed in the dark

I cringed and squirmed

Leaving no doubt of recovery

The slam shuddered from the depth of me

As I lay half-naked

Light peered thru the blinds

Investigating the reason

Soulful talk ensued

Consoling and caressing

Wiping and cooing

I looked deep into his eyes

With kohl smeared countenance

Something shook me…

Was it the chill of the night

Or the spine…?Amid angst

Hard touch checked my beats

As he smiled and smirked

Tears from above lashed

Deafening, numbing the senses

That has always been so…

While I lay vacant with traces of familiarity…



I think I've been concentrating entirely on fine art these days that I completely neglected my writing which by the way I am trying to refine. Please don't laugh at me. I really wish to write as fine as L'girl, Aniket, Cathy and Vesper. Not to forget l'tl Kriti. Since I started blogging I've put on hold my short stories to the entire dismay of my husband. So here comes the lash my friends...pls bear with me...

28 comments:

Creation said...

lash?
Are you friggin kidding me?!?!

This was beautiful!!!

And I didn't even know that you write as well!! :-(

You should write more...
You have natural talent darling!! :-)

Artist Unplugged said...

Good for you, you write until your heart is content....no laughing here! Loved your post yesterday, particularly the second one, 'foliage'.

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

This was a good piece of poetry.,..

I don't know who said, its not..

It had lot of depth and i think almost all your poems do... SO please don't think that way..

if you think that way, what should i think about me ..? :P

Cori Lynn Berg said...

It is perfectly wonderful to be able to express yourself through more than one medium. Good for you! And work in one form will inspire and enrich the other. Yes, it certainly can be difficult to keep more than one thing up at a time but there is a natural syncopated flow to our creative rhythms. Time for art, time for writing, time for art, time for writing. It's all your time.

Aniket said...

A lovely poem lovely poem!

You should seriously write more.
And you should seriously make your husband buy you a nice good camera so that you can do more justice to your paintings. (Just don't tell him I said so :D :D)

And come on... my writing prowess sucks big time... so does my vocab. Though I must admit I try my best to chose interesting topics so that they shadow my limited abilities. :D

Lynn said...

Thank you for sharing this writing of yours. I got all caught up in the story...quite intriging.
Love the new banner too! Now don't stop the art either.

soulbrush said...

yes, oh my goodness, you have certainly hidden this from us, wow!

deepazartz said...

I am so overwhelmed by your compliments that I am hitting the roof:)

Thank you guys for your love & support & I REALLY DO MEAN IT!!!

And regarding camera Ani, I mysteriously lost it 3 weeks bac thts when I started taking every pic with my mob.. How can I ask him for one more??? Poor Hubby!! :)

Lynn said...

Deep..I saw your request for the #5 ATC on my blog today. It is YOURS. Do email me your address so I can send it to you: lyn_fred1@comcast.net. Thanks. Lynn
So glad you like it and want it.

ruzzlan2312 said...

Camera will come, Poems will go on and so is good writing ! Keep writing, wonderful and inspiring text of this blog.

Inviting you again for art.

Little Girl Lost said...

deepz :)
i should have known...
a person who can paint and draw so beautifully cannot be anything but a poet. i'm so glad you decided to come out of the closet. :)

i blush that you put my name next to Cat and Vesper. i don't think i write so fine... but the thing we have in common, you me, aniket, kriti, Cat and all the other lovely poets i've been reading, is that we see something and feel a burning burning need to paint it in our own colours...

looking forward to seeing more poems and prose here, along with paintings...
love you :)

Lynn said...

Deep, please send me your address so I can mail you your ATC. Here is my email address:
lyn_fred1@comcast.net,
thanks.

deepazartz said...

Lynn, I've sent my mail ID...I am so happy to be receiving something from you:)I am so excited:)

deepazartz said...

Surely visit you again ruzzlan:)

deepazartz said...

Thats a HUGE, HUGE COMPLIMENT, L'tl girl. I am really happy to be receiving so many inspiring comments from all you great friends:)

Renee said...

I absolutely love the header picture.

The story made me cry. I don't know why but it touched something in me. You are very talented indeed.

Beautiful.

Love Renee xoxo

Bella Sinclair said...

Oh, Deepa! I didn't know you were such a beautiful writer, too. Why would anyone ever laugh at this. It's very emotional and moving. Wonderful drawing to go along with it, too.

I love your new banner! What a gorgeous lighthouse!

deepazartz said...

Renee, you've touched me...coz thts one of the INCREDIBLE comments I've ever had!!!!
I am so moved:)

deepazartz said...

Bella, you are such a dear!!
Thanks a lot for all of ur compliments:)

Renee said...

I am happy that it meant that much to you. But it was the truth.

Love Renee xoxo

Karin said...

This is my first visit here (via Renee's blog) and I'm deeply moved by your words - you have a powerful voice, and 'paint' a masterpiece with them!!

deepazartz said...

Love you Renee:)

Karin, Thanks for your visit and kind words. I am happy that you liked it:) Do keep visiting.

Anonymous said...

cool one deepu!!really liked it,long to see more of your writings and art work.My friends are at awe !!,they are all very impressed by your blog.

Mel M. M. McCarthy said...

How could anyone possibly laugh at your writing!?? I am a huge fan of poetry (and have even dabbled in publishing several creative writing journals) and your poem gave me shivers it was so very very VERY lovely! I hope you keep writing, because your voice is brilliant. Love your sketch too. Makes me want to try my hand at fine art again! Thank you so much for the beautiful inspiration. :O)

deepazartz said...

Thanks Mars:)

Mel, Your comment has taken me to heights..(floating!!!) I am so honored to feel that my writing has inspired you. Thanks a ziliion!!

Rajesh said...

Wonderful write up.

magiceye said...

this is brilliant!

Purba said...

And now she sketches with words....Loved it :)